Thank you so much for taking the time to critique!

The green accomplished exactly what I wanted it to do, then. I chose lackluster "green" and mundane "front lawn" because I wanted the reader to feel the value and beauty from the poetic language of "cinnamon sand dunes."

You're absolutely right that there is something weird about the word "cadenced." The second poem is supposed to be describing the Japanese concept of "ma" which is about the value of negative space with a connotation of intervals and movement through time (an example of "ma" would be the space between stepping stones). It's a concept traditionally associated with nature, but I wanted to make a statement about finding it in an urban environment. But you're absolutely right -- the way it's phrased doesn't communicate it well enough. I'll revise the last line.

Again, thank you so much!