I am about to undertake Nietzsche's Thus Spake Zarathustra . . .

irreal · 8 months

Thanks for the advice. It is much appreciated.

irreal · 8 months

The who's as in philosophers? Or do you mean people from different backgrounds as well?

irreal · 8 months

I'm weary of always hearing about him, too. That isn't really a reason to just downvote.

And as for undertake - seriously? I'm not just reading it. I am taking it on in a struggle to understand, therefore undertake.

Reddit is a strange place.

irreal · 8 months

Will do!

irreal · 8 months

Is there a reason for the down-votes? Have I done something wrong?

irreal · 8 months

Even when trying to take the stylistic forms of Homer's poetry (many references to gods, long descriptive passages, epithets, and the famous beginning invocation of the muses which you see here)? The poem is much longer than this now - it is an attempt to combine parts of epic poetry with the gutter-trash of a modern day meth user.

irreal · 8 months

Just joined IWW. I'm pretty excited. Thanks for recommending me to it!

irreal · 8 months

I have gotten a bit out of Critique Circle and Scribophile but I have found Critique Circle filled with angsty teenage vamp novels and Scribophile to be a community more focused on conversation on threads than actual critiquing. I will definitely check out IWW and Critters. I'm not necessarily looking for critique of a novel but of a Novella. Thanks again for the suggestions. I appreciate your time.

irreal · 8 months

As stated above, the poem is of a meth addict shooting up. I am glad someone got the idea that it is supposed to be mildly rambling. I asked another commenter and I want to ask you to: With the fore-knowledge of the poem being a description of an addict shooting up does the poem become clear? If so, how do you suggest incorporating it into the text without being blatant?

irreal · 8 months

It isn't finished. Look to the comment above.

Would it be more helpful to know the poem is about a young man shooting Methamphetamine? If so, any suggestions on incorporation into the poem? I thought the "Pleasure-wrought tears drip dropping off our hero’s cheek/As he pushes a plunger to peek a drip dropping off the needle-teeth." properly conveys the idea but maybe I am reading further into it than an average reader.

irreal · 8 months

Thanks! The poem originally didn't have a title so I kind of just threw one out for the name of the post. I'll look into line ten. And the reason sing to me, o muse is at the beginning is because its part of a longer piece written in the form of an epic poem (thus many references to gods, long descriptive passages, epithets, and the famous beginning invocation of the muses). Thanks again to take the time to read it!

irreal · 8 months

I would love some criticism. Any criticism is good so rip it apart.

rutface · 11 months

Really liked this.

irreal · 11 months

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irreal · 1 year

Will do. I'll have to reread Lolita and Pale Fire, as well.

irreal · 1 year

That sounds interesting. Please let me know if you find it. I would love to read it

irreal · 1 year

That sounds exactly like what I was looking for. Thank you so much!

Homest4r · 1 year

Mission accepted.

BlackHoleBrew · 1 year

Pure poetry. Easier to get a feel for when read aloud.

ambiversive · 1 year

I agree. I like the idea of the organism crafting a poetic response and am intrigued to read the verses. This is absolutely amazing.

irreal

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